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These errors need to be fixed in the attached document, please. You have demonstrated an understanding of writing your chapter 1. You have also narrowed the field of study. There are major issues that need to be addressed: 1. You need to narrow the scope of the problem. What is the problem and how do plan to address this problem? You have not clearly addressed that. 2. Literature review – Your literature presented are too old and not directly relevant to your problem you want to solve and the questions you want to answer. 3. Research questions are not aligned with the problem. As presented, they do not meet the criteria for a good dissertaton. 11/16/2019 Writers Hub – Freelance Writing https://www.writershub.org/writer/orders/502188#instructions 5/7 4. The proposed data and methodology is very limited in approach. 5. The proposed research presented is not something that your district or the universities IRB may approve. For this type of research you may need the attendanca and discipline record for all students who take 6th grade music education and do a correlation study with their 6th attendance and discipline. 1. The district will have to give all this data K-6th grade. 2. Just reviewing data for the dissertation is very limited in scope.
